Example of how not to write an historical essay.

I am writing in regards to Filomena's performance in my history class. Rather than wait until her report comes out this week to write a sentence or two, I would like to deal with her writing ability fully to keep you completely aware and hopefully come to some idea that could best help her improve. I am not sure if you are in contact with her homeroom teacher but suspect that as is too often …

…peruse her work. I am very cautious because I know that Filomena is very self-conscious and insecure. I talk to her a lot and she tells me how she needs to live up to her brother's lofty example. I don't want to do anything to add to her pressure, and therefore think it would be best if we kept this email private between ourselves. Please contact me at any time for advice, suggestions, comments, ideas.